[BB] Spawn

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  1. roses

    roses how do you admit that you're falling apart? Donator

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    IGN: Expedect (It's a solo project for once, yay!)
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    Description of the map: This spawn is a heavily festival themed map. There are colourful trees, beautiful landscapes and 2 waterfalls. A river runs through the middle of the area creating a small area for small shops, air balloons and a hay bale area. There is also a tranquil area with not as much activity where I see my self spending loads of time at.
    Screenshots: http://imgur.com/a/UHg74
    Credits to: Expedect. @KreoN's tree design was featured in there, but he didn't contribute to the project.

     
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    Don't tag us for no reason please
     
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    Okay
     
  5. RAMTurtle

    RAMTurtle *Slowly Losing Sanity* Donator

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    It looks amazing, however the boards look way too close together. I think you should spread them out a bit.
     
  6. roses

    roses how do you admit that you're falling apart? Donator

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    "Too close"?
    There is a solid 8-10 blocks between those signs.

    In person it's further apart.
     
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    Costellon �Digital Artist� Donator

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    Would you message me a download link?
     
  8. Darkstorm77

    Darkstorm77 Moderator | Mental Instability's Manifestation Staff Member Moderator

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    What sticks out to me:

    Minor
    -The walls have a stone theme where you switch on and off between gray blocks- but then it goes into dirt that does not. One is realistic (dirt) and one is a mashup (stone). I think you should pick one so they both integrate well. (Example of fix: placing blocks in with the dirt like soul sand).
    -Completely redo the sign board, especially the numbers. (Maybe you could make it bigger by having it lean into a mountain or something) but you want it giant because this is where every player goes. You don't want people getting lost in the spawn.
    -The arch looks nice but is a bit too "pinched" and does not have enough stone to back it up (the 2nd part might be controversial)
    -Add slabs into the main path as you did before so the ground has texture (it looks flat)

    Major
    -If you are going for "colorful", you should at least change the color of the grass. If not, create additions with color such as flowers or tents, etc.
    *If you can make it successfully all-around colorful, the build will be 10x better. Just changing the biome would help unless you want dull grass for a specific reason*


    -I don't get the theme once again. So you have grass/dirt on the very tops of the mountains, and then stone leading to the ground. But the ground is... grass? The last image on the left side looks like a cake with obviously separate layers (and then it doesn't continue!) I think you did a decent job with the terraforming itself but the block choice has me once again. Example to show the "cake layer"
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    We disagree extensively and some of these I don't think you will agree with but this is, from an outside point of view, what I think could be fixed. Not all of it needs to be fixed, but little details help. Good luck on the submission!
     
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  9. YouFoundGolem

    YouFoundGolem Mentally Dying Inside Donator

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    I like it!
     
  10. TwageTomato

    TwageTomato Former Mod Donator

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    Darkstorm at it again with the solid criticisms!
     
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  11. Andy

    Andy Helper Staff Member Helper

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    solid build, 6/10
    imo the terraforming could use some work, you can definitely see how they were made w/ voxel/worldedit, still a lil spherical at the top for my taste
    main join sign should be overall flat rather than in the curve, could prolly use the two curves for all info & continue to the join sign

    other than that, pretty good
     
  12. roses

    roses how do you admit that you're falling apart? Donator

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    It's barely even bigger than the last one I made, honestly, any smaller and it starts to lose its look.

    A lot of the things you're saying go against the advice I took from people from the build team.

    I actually, totally agree with you. I will be working on blending today. I was rushing it last night because I assumed I had things to do for the next few days but I didn't.

    Thanks.
     
  13. Radii

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    I suck at building so my opinion is worth nothing, but I really like the map, especially with the colorful trees!! I agree with Darkstorm when he said that the arch is a little too pinched. It makes it look unnatural. Other than that good job and good luck :smile:


    lel now you can comment without double posting
     
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  14. roses

    roses how do you admit that you're falling apart? Donator

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    ok, I have new screenshots after a biome change and a few obvious things

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    :)
     
  15. Witha

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    Hey um Expedect can we see this with a lower fov
     
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  16. roses

    roses how do you admit that you're falling apart? Donator

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    here ya go bud (trying not to throw up normal fov is garbage)

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    Don’t take this the wrong way, the designs are nice, but if we’re going to have an enclosed structure I prefer the one we have now because it feels more... homey.
     
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  19. roses

    roses how do you admit that you're falling apart? Donator

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    At least quote me
     
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  20. GBC

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    no c;
     
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