[Parkour] Waterfall Fantasy

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  1. zhyxer1756986398

    zhyxer1756986398 im in love with idk Donator

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    Minigame: Parkour
    Description of the map:

    Time Taken:
    4,5 days. (2 days technically, got banned on forums for 3 days)
    Get Started: Friday, 8 AM. (INDO timezone)

    Desc: I have plenty of screenshots below, but those aren't interesting enough look, but it's gonna be feel a bit different in-game otherwise.
    For some reason, I'm not good at taking screenshots actually. Whether it's bad or good, this is what I can do.
    I did it quite a bit slow during the middle of building progress. (Not taking to seriously lol.)

    Still can't figure it out to put my map into dropbox. This is what I can do so far, no further. What I mean only advices by adding some to improve a little.
    Help me with download too, thanks alot.

    • Map inspired when I had a big trip in Australia after graduation on 7th grade anniversary, and breeze island. ( SG Map). First part is pretty frustrating when I tested it.

    Screenshots:
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    I added some hollows, sea lanterns as you can see.

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    Walls*, vines, etc.

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    ItsJerry on point

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    Edited some edges.

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    According to @gamerrizz .
    Thanks =D

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    Credits to:
    (No partner)
     
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  2. meemo

    meemo the forgetful Donator

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    Its great!
     
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  3. zhyxer1756986398

    zhyxer1756986398 im in love with idk Donator

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    Thanks alot. :)
     
  4. bluetrashbag

    bluetrashbag hi Donator

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    Looks pretty good man
     
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  6. Draggon

    Draggon Resigned, Former M.o.d Donator

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    Dude this looks fantastic, but maybe if you took the screenshots in a nice texture pack It'll look a lot better. I recommend the Chroma Hills texture pack.
     
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  7. Cutiex

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    Like @TheFlamingDragon said, texture pack will look better.

    Positives:
    It looks great! But if you add a texture pack, like Chroma hills or Faithful. It will make it a better chance of accepting, I love it. Now add a little more detail to the map. It will be a lot better, maybe a little bit of more waterfalls, I do not recommend adding too much water to this map. It will make it bad.

    Make it better by adding a couple more trees or any surrounding, flowers, trees, mushrooms etc. It will add a little more feeling to the map otherwise, now the outside of the map looks a little boring, try adding some jungle trees to make the map a little more good on the outside, even if the jungle trees can't be seen, just stack them by putting a piece of dirt on top of a leaf.

    Negatives:
    Now this map is cool, but I do not understand why bookshelves can be seen in some of these screenshots, if it's there for a mine treasure or something, it would be better for a mini map or something along those lines. This map is really good! The jumps look boring, try to make them a little harder, so the player can have a bit of a challenge, try to make the jumps a little higher for this map.

    After all this map is great for detail, this map would be better a little bit if you take this advice from me! ^^

    After all great map! Not that much! Good luck :)
     
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  8. Darkstorm77

    Darkstorm77 Moderator | Mental Instability's Manifestation Staff Member Moderator

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    This looks nice, and is definitely one of our nicer parkour map submissions. If I would comment on anything, the walls of terraforming are just too flat. You should add a bit more depth in that. (I also agree to points made above) Good job.
     
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  9. gippy

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    Amazing! I just want to say add some texture to the walls they look flat.
     
  10. zhyxer1756986398

    zhyxer1756986398 im in love with idk Donator

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    About texture packs, it doesn't really necessary. Perhaps everyone may have their own packs. But I'll try to download it, thanks once again.
    Fixed.
     
  11. Cutiex

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    Ok, I was just suggesting it for you :)
     
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  12. FrozenFire

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    This is really cool! Are the buttons supposed to be rocks or something? (Sorry, I cant tell :v)
     
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  13. zhyxer1756986398

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    It is.
     
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  14. Gamerrizz

    Gamerrizz Minecraft Realms MapMaker | Creator of Dodge!

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    Hey, gonna give a bit of criticism. It has some potential but, I feel it needs improvement to get added. First, try not to make the terrain so square as having square terrain doesn't look original and cool. Also, for the terrain add some colors that are more natural such as clay,wool,soul sand, etc. Make some custom trees as well so its more natural and cooler, you can make some really small and cool custom trees that can brighten up your map a lot if you wanted. The structures as well are quite simplistic so I would recommend changing that as well. When I look at structures I look at it and go "Can this potentially be used for a structure in real life?" Think on that mind set for structures and, think of original palates/shape/depth, etc.

    Thanks!
     
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  15. zhyxer1756986398

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    I fixed that terrain a little before, but I'll work on trees, thanks again.
     
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    That looks amazing! I think if you added like a fish construction in one of the jumps it would look really cool! Other than that, the building looks extremely well made. Great job! :) If you could, I'd suggest recording all the jumps and stuff, that'd be awesome.
     
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    Hi.
     
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    you did a great job on this! i really like it
     
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    Thanks :D
     
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    Pretty nice job!
    You have my full support m8 <3
    I hope this gets accepted.
     
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