A Short Poem About The Ocean

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  1. IAMINACTIVEBYE

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    Hi, so I was bored and wanted to practice writing so here's a short poem. You can comment any suggestions or advice below, but commenting stuff like 'It sucks' and 'It's bad' will not help me at all nor improve any of my work. If you don't like it or don't think it's descriptive, instead of just saying it's bad, suggest some ways to improve it calmly and with respect. :D


    At the end of land's cliff,
    is a sapphire blanket that drifts.
    Crumbs of diamonds sprinkled on the ocean's blanket,
    With enrichment to every salt in the waves bouquets.
    When touched by the ocean it will bring a tang of spring and slither,
    but when engulfed you'll feel force and quiver.
    When light strokes the ocean's back,
    pixels of white would then reflect and be intact.
    The ocean is home to many creations;
    stitching love between all and the core of relations.

    Every shift and move the blanket makes,
    the water would either join or break.
    Under the ocean's mind and joints,
    you'll discover darkness and undiscovered points.
    Ever since the ocean's birth,
    it's brought enrichment to the earth.
    But slowly it suffers and will soon vanish
    when life keeps feeding it remains and plastic,
    and when the ocean is no longer found;
    we'll still all drown.



    So yeah, that's my poem that I just randomly made. Hope you like it :)
     
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    Love it. :D
     
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    That's very deep and creative, it's wonderful!
     
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